This was my first attempt and these are my after review analysis.
1) I didn't have my shoulders square
2) I was looking mostly at his legs instead of being eyes on eyes
Mojo and I have already had a somewhat connection and so I don't know if that may have influenced the result, which I wouldn't say was a success. Looking forward to your feedback.
https://youtu.be/HjsU-ud4Kww?si=qlSsyaenj7Y17-fE



Your follow up could be calmer, although I fully understand your excitement at your success. Your horse is working extra hard for you, making huge allowances for your communications. That's not bad so long as you are aware. A less experienced horse will be somewhat bewildered with your conversation. Keep studying, practice both in a mirror and in real life. Let us know how you get on. Cheers, Jo.